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(7/11/04 8:21) Reply
RoseAuthor Name: Aleks Title: Rose Rating: PG Genre: Free verse Disclaimer: My pathetic attempt at being "deep" LOL Summary: Sometimes we're under the impression that we behold all power... Feedback: Whatever floats your boat!
The rose I hold is majestic, proud, a bright, blood red.
I have complete control over it.
Its petals are delicate and frail.
I could crush the small, scarlet leaves in an instant, before anyone could stop me.
I could crumple them without resistance.
I could cut it up into pieces, throw them away,
let the wind scatter each bit in a different direction.
I could crush it to the ground with my foot.
I could pluck each petal, one by one, slowly, until the rose is naked, pitiful.
Its petals are at my mercy.
I have the power to steal its beauty.
The rose, though beautiful, is defenseless.
Suddenly my finger meets a thorn; a droplet of blood flows down my hand.
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(7/11/04 8:09) Reply
Re: Rose
YAY.. our very first poem.. and a beauty.. from the
luverly Aleks..
I like darling, eventough it's still a bit dark, i feel for that poor rose, what did he do to deserve such a cruel fate.
Nice going though..keep 'em coming.
thanks Jozer!
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(8/11/04 21:56) Reply
Re: Rose
hmm, very beautifully written.
You describe so many things in such a short space but i felt i came away with so much ... i felt like i had recieved a new insight into roses.
Re: Rose
Lovely work. I particularly liked the first and last lines. The first gives a great opening with the descriptions and the last blood red. Not just red, or dark red… but blood red, already giving the poem a darker feel.
And that ending was great, it put a smirk on my face. I hope to see more from you!
~Balel~
Re: Rose
what a lovely, modern way of describing irony...a paradox... *thoughtful* it totally rules, aleks. explore this particular track, aleks. i really think it suits you the best, when it comes to poetry. it very appeals to the kind of person you are - and if you keep going down this path dear, i believe you'll find it a very rewarding journey.
YAY.. our very first poem.. and a beauty.. from the 
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