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dedicatedlgfan 
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(31/10/04 8:54)
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MY FIC!!
Author Name:dedicatedlgfan
Title: working on it
Rating: pg13
Genre: comedy, a mix of things really
Disclaimer: I made up these characters so they belong to me!
Summary: A young girl is devasted to find that her best friend is moving away. She makes plans to bring him back. Plans that would get her into deep trouble with her father and the police.
Feedback: any and all.

Chapter 1


Have you ever saw someone and thought to yourself "he's mine!"? I think every girl goes through that about 10 billion times in their life. Maybe we are, as most guys say, insane psycho maniacs who can't make up our minds. Of course we think the same of them. It's a weird twisted world we live in today and I'm proud to call it home.

"Finished," 15 year old Mikela Welch closed her diary. She had recieved the blue satin covered book from her father on her tenth birthday. She had since written a page in it every day. It contained her most secret desires, dreams, crushes, and a few opinions on the opposite sex.
"Good night, Micky." Her father called from outside her bedroom door. "Dad, come in for a minute," she called back. Mr.Welch entered the room, wearing his night robe. Mikela had bought it for him the previous Father's Day. "What's on your mind?" he asked his daughter.
Mickela twisted her hair nervously in her hands. "Well, the big day is almost here." she began hopefully. "Ah yes, your sweet sixteen." he nodded. "Right,and I was wondering if..." "Yes?" "If you were going on a business trip again this year around the same time." She looked at him hopefully, and he laughed! "I'm staying here of course. I want you to have the best birthday ever." he smiled and kissed her on the head. "Is there anything you really want this year?" he asked
Mikela smiled at some hidden thought. It was hers alone to cherish and she wasn't going to share it with anyone. Especially not her father. "Whatever you want to get me will be fine."
She tried to stifle an oncoming yawn, but was unsuccessful. "I better get my beauty sleep" They both laughed and said good night one more time. Mikela reached over to her night table and picked up the only picture of her mother that she owned. "I wish you were here. You're
the only one who can give me advice. I'm sure you know what I'm talking about, but I can't say anything incase dad's eavesdropping again." She kissed the picture and lay down. She fell asleep almost instantly.
"There's gotta be a better way to wake up in the morning," Mick complained as she pulled up a chair for her breakfast. "Are you referring to the special alarm the birds have arranged for you?" Her father winked. "You'd think they'd stop by now, right?" she placed her empty dish into the sink. Trying to get on the positive side of things that morning, she
added. "Perhaps I should be thankful. It's better than getting up too late and not getting to school on time." She took a deep breath. "I'm actually quite refreshed today. I think I might head out early." She looked around the room." What's the time?" her father checked his watch and said "It's 5 o'clock." Mikela's head fell onto the table and she let out a
long agonozing groan. "Well I guess it's too early to leave right now" she slowly got herself up and headed back to her room.

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"Oh bloody hell!" Mick screamed at her alarm clock. "It can't be morning time yet." Mick's eyes slowly opened to be greeted by the glare of the morning sun. She got up slowly, her eyes scanning the room for her favorite blue jeans and white halter top. "Dad! have you seen my clothes?" she called down the stairs. "In the dryer!" was his reply. Mick got up from her bed and headed for the laundry room. She only got a feew steps before she became very dizzy. "Dad!" she yelled once again. She soon heard her father's footsteps headed her way. "What's wrong.....are you ok, mick?" he looked worried. "I think I'm sick." she sniffed. "Can I stay home?" Mr. Welch, seeing the distress in his daughter's eyes, nodded. "I'll call your principal and let him know." Mick nodded and layed down again.
It seemed like hours before she woke up again. Feeling a little better, she tried to sit up. A soft knock came at her door. "Dad?" she called. Why would her father knock? Don't parents usually just barge right in? No matter if you're dancing in the nude or not? She shook her head laughing, and opened the door, fully dress I'm glad to report. "hey mickey!" her friend, Riley greeted her. He was the first guy friend she'd ever had. In fact, he had been her best friend for 10 years. She smiled and gave him a welcoming hug. "Brought you the work for tonight." He handed her a stack of text books. " Gish, I don't know how to thank you," she rolled her eyes. "Uh, I was wondering if you were doing anything on saturday?" He gave her a hopeful look. "Why...oh right! Yeah I'm free." "Great." "Yeah." She reached for her diary, which was sitting out in the open. She couldn't let him see it, it would ruin her. "So, what's new?" she tried to think of something to talk about, but nothing came to her. "Well, I think Mr. Smith's got some sort of moldy garlic fungus growing on him somewhere." He smirked. Mikela laughed. "Smelling extra bad today, huh?" "You'd think he'd notice his own stench, right?" Riley sighed. "He won't even let us open a window!"
Mikela tried to hide a grin but it was impossible. "You're horrible!" he declared. "Is my misery really that amusing to you?" Mick smiled sheepishly and replied "Yes." It was the beginning of what some might call 'the pillow fight of the century.'

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The longer you suck on it.....the better

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The harder you suck on it...the more enjoyable it is

dedicatedlgfan 
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(31/10/04 8:56)
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Re: MY FIC!!
Chapter 2

Why can't we keep our mouths shut, when we know that what we are going to say, is a curse? I mean, if we tell ourselves that the day couldn't possibly get any worse, should we expect the end of the rainbow to land in front of us. Complete with a leprechaun and pot of gold? Apparently not. I think a thunderstorm, complete with heavy winds to blow puddles into our new outfit, and cars speeding pass to throw their garbage out the window at us, should be fully expected.

"Dad! why didn't you wake me?" Mick rushed downstairs. It was 8 o'clock and her bus arrived at 8:15. "Dad? hello?" Where is he? She noticed a note taped to the fron door. It was writen on her animal writing paper. Mickey! Had to head off to work early today. I've left ten dollars for your lunch. Have a good day. Love Dad.

Figures. She searched the kitchen for the money. Nothing. She searched the living room. Nothing. Where the hell is it? ah there we go! She checked that she had all her things and headed out the door.....in time to see her bus pull away and speed down the street."Wait!" she ran after the bus, flinging a rock near to get the driver's attention. It was no use. Her stomach lurched as she watched it turn the corner and dissapear from sight. "Great great great!" she mumbled to herself. I can't be late again! Mr.Smith'll kill me!Her mind reeled as she searched it for an alternative solution. "I got it!" She stormed back in the house to call a taxi. "Why does all the @#%$ stuff happen to me?" she pondered as she looked up the number in the phone book. "There it is!" she punched in the numbers and waited for an answer. "yes! hello? Can I get a cab to 13 Fairview Terrace?" she waited for a reply "yes that's right. yes. ok thank you." she hung up and sighed. Twenty minutes? I may as well just run to school. Having made up her mind, she grabbed her bag and headed out the door and down the street. Mikela and her father lived in a quiet neighborhood. There were few smaller children there, which meant no high pitched screaming from obnoxious little twerps. Mick couldn't stand little kids, which made being an only child extra cool. Reaching the street corner, she noticed a blur of yellow speed past. "huh?" no way! It can't be! "Twenty minutes my ass!" she screeched as she raced back down the street to her driveway. "Waiiiiiiiiit!" she called desperately, flailing her arms wildly in the air. She reached it just in time. In time that is, to see her neighbor, Ms. lois, get in and the cab speed off. Taking a long, slow, deep breathe, she grabbed a firm hold of her belongings and stormed stormed down the street. Apparently, walking was her only option. Could this get any worse? She was answered by a low rumble in the distance. "What are you waiting for?" she called to the greying sky. "You know you want to. I'm such an easy target," she rolled her eyes and groaned as a tiny raindrop hit her face and rolled down her cheek. An idea started to form in that tiny brain of hers. "This is the best day in the world," she smiled. If being miserable was going to bring bad weather, perhaps being happy would bring the sun out. Right? As if! "Hey baby!" a gangly looking man....er woman......Mikela didn't know what the hell it was.....whistled and flicked it's tongue out at her. eww. She quickly sped off to the end of the road. Just 2 more blocks. She told herself. ok you're so close. She walked herself through it. Nothing more worse than that can possibly happen. Boy was she wrong. There's nothing worse than being 20 blocks from home and have a car speed past, forcing a puddle to splash all over your clothes. Which is exactly what happened. "Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! I'm gonna kill someone!" she screamed to the skies. A little old lady sitting on a bench nearby looked at her skeptically."What are you staring at?!" Mick screamed "like you've never had a bad day in your life!"
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"Now, who would like to sing some barney tunes?" Mick's substitute teacher asked. Is she for real? Mick wondered. She could only stare, wide eyed at the teacher. She'd been doing so for the last two hours, her eyes stinging with tears from the lack of blinking. Why couldn't I have taken my time getting here? Must.....not......kill......myself! Why? why is she doing this to me? oh my god! WHY?! "Why what?" the teacher asked. "uh...." Mikela glanced around the room at the staring, pleading eyes of her peers. "Why do we have to sing barney stuff? How old...or young...do you think we are?" Mrs. Kit was not impressed. "Barney is very educational." her eyes glowered. "Now, Mikela, you will sing a song with me. Everyone else, listen!" Mrs.Kit began to hum and then she burst out into birdlike song:
"I love youuuuu. You love meeeee........" but Mick had her own version, and bellowed at the top of her lungs:
"I hate youuu. You hate meeee.
let's tie Barney to a treeeee
Take a ten barrel shot gun, shoot him in the head
oopsie doopsie barney's dead!!!!"
Mick smiled and bowed to the thundering applause of her classmates. "Thank you! I'll be back next week to do another," she laughed and sat down again.
"So, you think you're funny do you?" Mrs. Kit asked. Mick tried to look remorseful, but there was no hope. "Office!Now!"
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"Hello," Mick greeting the secretary. "Mrs. Kit sent me down for bitching out Barney." The secretary looked at Mikela and cocked an eyebrow. "Have a seat please. Mr. Anderson is just finishing up with another student." Mick grabbed a book from the coffee table and took a seat. The office was , surprisingly, rather inviting. It had a plant rooted to the corner between the principle's office, and the couch. The walls were painted with a warm burgundy feel. The carpet, a beige. She flipped through the magazine, not really paying attention to it's contents. What had her attention, was the voices coming from within Mr. Anderson's office. "When are you moving?" "In a month," it was a boy's voice. It sounded familiar, but Mikela couldn't place it. "Ok I think we'll just send your record to your new school ourself. If that's ok with you." Mr. Anderson questioned. "Yes that's fine." "Great! I guess that's all I need you for. You may go now." The door opened and the duo stepped out into the main office. Mikela gasped and stared at the boy. He obviously hadn't seen her, for he walked right passed her, ready to go back to class. I'm dreaming. She told herself. Her stare must've caught his attention, because he turned around at the door to face her. It was his turn to stare. Mikela finally found enough voice to say," you're moving?" Riley could do nothing but flap his mouth open and shut like a fish, and Mikela couldn't help but think that this was officially the worst day of her life

Edited by: dedicatedlgfan at: 28/1/06 13:13
dedicatedlgfan 
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(31/10/04 8:57)
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Re: MY FIC!!
why can't people ever take you seriously when you say "shoot me now. Put me out of my misery!" Seriously, do they think we're joking?


Mikela walked out of the office, tears tickling her cheek as they flowed freely down her face. How could he do this? She didn't go back to class. Her feet led her aimlessly through the quiet streets outside. The sound of children playing was silenced by the scraping of chalk on a blackboard. Everyone was still in school. She was alone. She shivered as a sharp wind whistled past her. Wishing she'd stopped to get her coat from her locker, she wrapped her arms around herself and quickened the pace. Her father wouldn't be home for another few hours. It was safe to go home, without being interrogated by him.
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Mikela was doing her homework, when the doorbell rang.
"Dad! Can you get it? I'm busy," she called as the door rang again.
Ten minutes later, she was packing up her school bag and heading downstairs.
"Who was at the door?" she asked as she dished up some mashed potatoes and chicken.
"Riley. I invited him over for dinner. Says he's got something important to talk with us about."
Mick's eyes got wide and there was a slight tremble in her voice.
"Gosh, I hope he's not dying." Then under her breath she muttered, "'cause that would save me the trouble of having to kill him myself!"
"You wish," Riley answered her from the table.
"Just get to the point,"she snarled
"Ok here goes....I'm moving!"
Mikela almost snorted milk out her nose.
"No @#%$!"
"Mikela! Watch your mouth!" her father became angry.
"Well sorry, but he's being so......obvious," she apologized. "I already knew about it."
She put down her fork
"I'm going out for a bit," she wiped her face clean with a napkin.
"Where to?" her dad wondered.
"Just for a walk." "I won't be long," she added
"I'm coming," Riley stated matter of factly.
"Whatever."
The evening was warm. A slight refreshing breeze made it the perfect night for a walk.
They walked in dead silence for what seemed hours. The sounds of there shoes slapping the pavement echoed like a cat in a blender.
"Can we talk?" Riley asked
"uh...no," she replied flatly.
"Mikela Maria Welch you listen to me...NOW!" he spun her around to look at him.
They were face to face. Their anger passing from one another like bolts of lightening.She'd never realized before how beautiful his eyes were. A bright tantalizing green. They were moistened by tears, making them look like the ocean after a good rainfall. She shook her head. She musn't lose focus. She was first to speak.
"Riley, When my mom died you said you'd always be there for me, no matter what." her eyes glistened as she narrowed them. "And now...." she took a deep breath. "Now you're planning to move away without so much as a goodbye?" Her teeth became clenched, her words menacing. "You're nothing but a coward." "I hate you." she had said enough. Giving one more disgusted shake of the head, she rushed past him.
"......and you never look at the facts," he called out. "You haven't even asked me why I'm leaving.
Mikela slowed her pace.
"Why?" she called back, not turning around .
This should be good
"Megan's sick. Really sick. I want to be there for her as much as I can." he started
Mikela didn't know what to say. All her anger seeped out of her like a hole in a balloon. She now understood. She realized that no words of comfort were available for the frail, tired figure before her. Megan, a sweet innocent lovable child of only 4 years, was Riley's little sister. She lived with his dad and stepmom. "Ri, I'm sorry". she finally managed a word or two. "About Megan, I mean." I don't think I was ever wrong in being angry at you though. Why didn't you say anything sooner?" she was hurt at the thought.
"I'm only going for a few months," he began."I would never leave forever without a proper goodbye."
"are you sure about that?" before he could answer, she walked away. He knew for a fact that trying to stop her again would be pointless

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The longer you suck on it.....the better

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The harder you suck on it...the more enjoyable it is

Edited by: dedicatedlgfan  at: 1/11/04 1:59
Kailawen Everwood 
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(31/10/04 14:51)
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Re: MY FIC!!
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I'm only going for a few months," he began."I would never leave forever without a proper goodbye."


Awwwwww! Such a sweetie. I wish all Blokes were like that.

Quote:
"are you sure about that?" before he could answer, she walked away. He knew for a fact that trying to top her again would be pointless


Essh. Sure she's hurting, but is that any reason to take it out on him like that? Geez...

Read it before darl, but readin again! Put more up soon!



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lil Aussieroo 
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(31/10/04 16:41)
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Re: MY FIC!!
Hey Jen, i havnt read this one yet and im loving it! i love the way its narrated ... its very well done!

just one thing ... at the end here

Quote:
He knew for a fact that trying to top her again would be pointless

is it meant to be top or Stop? just curious thats all.

You express things in such a realistic way ... it really feels like im standing by and actually watching a day or two of the life story of someone. Well done cant wait to read more!

Manawydan 
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(31/10/04 21:55)
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WOOOT! Now I can read it in two places! Love it darling!
Go on, go on...


thanks Jozer!

dedicatedlgfan 
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(1/11/04 1:42)
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:ilu

Thanks ladies!
ames~ yeah it was STOP!lol

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The longer you suck on it.....the better

Chocolate is a lot like the Dommeh
The harder you suck on it...the more enjoyable it is

lil Aussieroo 
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(2/11/04 23:42)
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Re: MY FIC!!
thats cool, its what were here for! ... oh yeah btw ... more more! :clap


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